5.5.11

The moment of truth(Essay)

Yesterday, I want to ride my bicycle.I look for a key.It was not there.So I went to my mother and said, 'Can you help me find the bicycle key? I cannot find it.'So mother and I look for the key.Mother and I still cannot find it.So Mother and I went to my triplet brothers and said, 'can you help me find my bicycle key? I cannot find.'So my triplet brothers,my mother and I look for the key.My triplet brothers, my mother and I STILL cannot find it.So my triplet brothers, my mother and I went to my father and my sister and said, 'Can you help us find my bicycle key? We cannot find it.'So my father, my mother, my triplet brothers, my sister and I look for the key.My sister saw it in the shelf.I was very happy but it is all ready afternoon so I have to wait until evening.








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14 comments:

  1. That's good, but......you need to learn a bit about PAST TENSE.

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  2. You need a key for your bike?

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  3. Yes because my bike has a security to protect it from being stolen.I need a key the open the security.

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  4. you don't know the right tense! and your words are all squished up together. you also need to learn about margining and entering and CAPITLIZATION.

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  5. What is margining and capitlization means?

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  6. Margining means your words are all squished up together and need to be separated. (just kidding, i made that word up). Your essae should be like this....: Yesterday, I wanted to ride my bicycle. I looked for the key. It wasn't there. So I went to my mother and said,
    'Can you help me find the bicycle key? I cannot find it.'
    So Mother and I looked for the key. Mother and I still couldn't find it. So Mother and I went to my triplet brothers and said,
    'Can you help us find the bicycle key? We cannot find it.'
    So my triplet brothers, my mother and I looked for the key. My triplet brothers, my mother and I STILL cannot find it. So my triplet brothers, my mother and I went to my father and my sister and said,
    'Can you help us find the bicycle key? We cannot find it.'
    So my father, my mother, my triplet brothers, my sister and I look for the key. My sister saw it in the shelf. I was very happy but it was already afternoon, so I had to wait until evening.

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  7. ;)
    When you're older, you'll learn about that. You can copy what I fixed and paste it in the post.

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  8. You only need to marginm in math. Newr is just tricking you and trying to use big words...

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  9. At H: Ugh you always think you know everything. Margining is used everywhere. Now don't answer back something know it all, because you are so killable.

    At Qa: Sorry. H is very annoying.

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  10. @ Newr: Najwa is my mother's name.

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